A lasso you have thrown around
a kingdom and its only sun -
a loupe that you still look into,
though these recede away from you,
through which whose blur you strive to see
and to announce illuminance
grows dimmer as the day will do
to veil a topaz provenance.
Author notes
see contest photo
A contest entry
- WHAT DO YOU SEE? [2] by skylark anointed.
800 points, ended August 6, 2008, 22 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Interesting choice of words...
Many people chose to describe the image in the photograph, but you were able to think outside of the box even with a very literal interpretation.
My favorite line:
to veil a topaz provenance
Well done!
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I am very impressed. I baulked at line five, finding the grammar a tripfall, but re-read and re-read and realised its precision. Are there many other poets on here who play with language the way you do?
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A jewel of a poem. Exquisitely crafted, the conceit works beautifully.
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