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You run to one end but the other one follows, the road trying to swallow you up before you can finish it.

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  • enitsirhC
    June 21, 2008

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    This poem has a really powerful message.
    That's really impressive for a one-liner

    Very well done!

    Best of luck in your contest dear.


  • music-office-ghost
    June 21, 2008

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    Brilliant

    I agree that the beginning of this is powerful enough but I think it might seem lacking without the ending...


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    June 14, 2008
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    Brilliant!!!

    Best of luck to ya!!!


  • theworldisquiethere
    June 9, 2008

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    Honestly, I think this is powerful enough with only the first half. Running to one end, but the other following, love the imagery!


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    June 8, 2008
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    Very creative this one is. This is life, exactly. The road, always following, always swallowing us up as we traverse down it. This holds a lot of imagery here too. Keep writing. I like this a lot. Good luck in the contest.

    With
    Dark
    Love
    Wayne Leon

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