My Past
Conversation, nonsense chatter.
Lingering hands, I was just a girl.
Innocent smile, you were my teacher.
Thoughts of running, body was frozen.
Wandering eyes, all over my body.
Saddened smile, I felt violated.
Broken trust, in you and others.
Writing notebook, only escape.
Trembling hands, knife on skin.
Rusting heart, forgotten teen.
My Now
Love at first sight, someone I trust..
Dried tears, you won't break me.
Growing patience, for getting better.
Glaring eyes, whenever I see you.
Nightmares fading, dreams awakening.
Lost of job, you had it coming.
Smiles and Hugs, my soul is healing.
Bright future, I'm stronger now.
Fading scar, you are behind me.
Author notes
This is a little different. It is more of a story poem. It isn't like anything i have ever done before but I think it is unique..
I am Velvet Rose Petals. I've been broken and now I am healing..
Dark angel- i think we have a lot in common in that i dont like my family much either. I am a good friend and I am always there when needed. I am a godo listener and i give good advice. I'd like to to be your broken twin sister..
A contest entry
- To Start Things Off... by Simply Simple.
300 points, ended July 2, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dancing With the Scars by Kathryn Bowden.
600 points, ended June 25, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Largest Contest On AP!!!! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
3000 points, ended August 26, 2008, 1708 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Where's MY AP family? by Falling in Loveless.
300 points, ended September 20, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I don't know...
Comments
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This is fantastic Gin, my favourite thing I've ever read my you.
Amazing.
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yay, a twin. its good to here that someone is able to heal while once broken. that will give a little hope for me. thank you so much for entering~!
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Ok, what I really liked about this piece was the contrast. The contrast being the layout, which is quite, soft, gentle and comforting, compared to the subject matter being written about.
I found this dark, very dark, deep and so sad too. But it had a wonderful ending. I think you deserve praise for this. Your emotions really came through and I felt them, as much as I could, in those horrific circumstances. Keep writing, you have talent.
With
Dark
Love
Wayne Leon
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I've always seen roses as both though. They hold beauty, but then their thorns are evil and dark. The poem was supposed to be pretty dark but i wanted to end it on a happy note because that is where i am in my life. I really would like the thank you for taking the time and reading my poems. It means a lot to me
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Such raw, beautifully carved emotion I find impossible to critique in any way. I love this poem, your strength, the truth. I am glad to know a beautiful soul as you is healing.
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Thank you.
I guess it was pretty easy to write though.
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I love this its so real and shows how people can conqour there past. Awsome write
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i liked your style in this and the way you presented each stanza, I believe you intended your words to be "choppy" and I was able to pick up on the "beat" of your poem pretty quickly....interesting write, nice job!
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I fell in love with this poem from beginning to end. You are very talented Rose. Keep up the good work.
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wonderful write. this was very touching and full of real emotion. Your pain shines through the first stanza as well as your hope in the second. Thank you for taking time to enter and good luck.
Kathryn
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Thank You So Much
that means so much to me. Good luck judging the contest, there are many good poems you have to choose through.
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Amazing! I love it! So real, so sad, so amazing. It's just... Wow! I do request the author's name in author's notes. I really did love the last line.
Thanks for entering.
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Thank you
I'm sorry. I added my name. I went through every poem of mine to find the perfect one, but I knew I would enter this one. It's recent and it is different.
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Applause-applause-applause!
WOW! YOu truly unleashed your heart so gently and flowingly revealing bold beauty of soul!
way to write! this is truly a feast for the heart!
smartly written too!
and so true..we need to have powerful self-talk to ourselves sometimes! good things are going to happen
for me today, good things are going to happen through
me today.
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It Was Hard
when i first started writing about it. It was so hard. But writing it out made it easier to tell and after that everything got easier..
now my life is sorta normal and I am happy and this is different then what i have ever done before for a poem.. so i dont know
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