I close my eyes,
It can't be true,
From all the love,
That I felt for you,
Now your gone,
We all must die,
But I didn't expect it to be so quick,
It took me by surprise.
Now your gone,
Your coffin awaits,
The tears that I cry,
Won't make you awake,
I never told you,
what you meant to me,
But now that your gone,
My feeling are history.
2 years later,
I'm staying at home,
Not listening to a thing,
That's going on,
My dreams are haunted,
My eyes now bleed,
For every tear that I've shed,
Is from my lonesome greed.
I've finally decided,
What's wrong is right,
because my scars,
The pain is bright,
They'll never leave my skin,
Like you left the light,
Please forgive me,
For the fight.
Author notes
This poem is dedicated to my sister whom I'll always love. R.I.P Maddy, I'll always love you.
A contest entry
- Dancing With the Scars by Kathryn Bowden.
600 points, ended June 25, 2008, 11 entries
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Comments
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Hi! wonderful, powerful poem full of raw emotion. Your flow is choppy in places, especially in S1 L6 it really just doesn't work for me. This line is too long and really breaks up your flow. I think with a little editing this is something that could be easily fixed. other than that this is a great piece. Thanks for taking time to enter and good luck.
Kathryn
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BEAUTIFUL & POWERFULI
[i love it]
my favrotie lines are
"close my eyes,
It can't be true,
From all the love,
That I felt for you,"
it flows freely and smoothi lost a friend (via suicide) and it sucked
but
i know they wouldnt want me to be sad
i understand why he did it
he was in ALOT of pain
i do miss he
sometimes i see him in my dreams
he's just a angel with broken wings
(keep it up)
Brokenlovelyness
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i agree with velvet rose petals
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Ugh this made me tear up. It's sad when things end on a bad note. Its the worst thing that can happen. I am sorry for your loss, but with time I hope you can heal. This is magnificent!
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