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Without A Sound

Choose your evil, the options are yours,
Nothing is forbidden unless you close that door.
We act as if sin is to be debated and played,
Wonder if losing is the name of the game.

Society is more interested in what others do,
as if wearing blinders will lessen the screws,
Turn your back and click your heels,
Hell and hate all come without heart.

We make our own abyss then impose it on others,
self-preservation : not a gift from the strong-hearted,
only empty will come from faking and taking,
our self-imposed deaths leave us disrelated.


(c) Debby Sorensen Carlson
  6/7/2008




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Hell is just the next entertainment..Lute

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  • celadia
    June 13

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    You stated some fantastic truths here ones that we mostly forget, we do close doors ourselves don't we and we are to blame for ignoring what we do ourselves when we bug others about what they're doing.

  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    June 12

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    Hmmmmm. Very entertaining and cutting.
    I see the many facets of society, our participation, and the perception we have of one another. Lots of *red flags* here.
    You deal with many of the random thoughts.

    Nice blank verse overall. Sounds like you know
    about it... ahhhhhh wisdom! Thank you

    • Debbysmiles gold member
      June 12
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      CookieZeal

      Thank you ! I'm glad you stopped by and enjoyed this piece. Blessings.d

  • Redrusty66
    June 10

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    Great piece as usual. The message is one of obvious truth ignored. "we make our own abyss then impose it on others". What an awesome line, so many hold that secret as the foundation of their cruelty, as with most things the outward agression or malice upon others is often based soley within ones own hatred of themselves.

    Insightful and flawless as usual.

    • Debbysmiles gold member
      June 10
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      Russ

      Thank you for your thoughtful comments. As always, you have the meaning exact !

  • Zanerus
    June 8

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    Wow I felt truth but a hint of a bitter undertone, unless that of course was my poet's voice reading the bitterness. There is power in ever line, "self-preservation : not a gift from the strong-hearted,
    only empty will come from faking and taking,
    our self-imposed deaths leave us disrelated. " Interesting way to end it. Good luck.


    • Debbysmiles gold member
      June 8
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      Z..

      You heard it with your poet's voice as I wrote it with mine. I feel what is around me and take those emotions and sights and write. Ofcourse, my own beliefs play into everything. Thank you for reading and commenting.. Blessings.d

      • Zanerus
        June 9
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        Of course, Beliefs are own world... There is no other way to word it. Your welcome. keep writing.

  • tainfinite silver member
    June 8

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    taiinfinite

    wow this is good an xcellent write so true, when you take the absolute (GOD) out of society then society becomes absolute, thats not my quote heard a preacher man say that. how true


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    June 8

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    These words are true. Especially this part:

    'Society is more interested in what others do,
    as if wearing blinders will lessen the screws',

    Very powerful sentence in those lines there. Again, a piece of writing that is thought-provoking and written very well indeed.

    Well done. Good luck in the contest.

    With
    Dark
    Love
    Wayne Leon


  • Cannonsfire silver member
    June 8
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    How true your words. Thank you for the entry. Love, C

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