He takes one last look back at her
His love, his life
Before he leaves to do what he must
To put food on the table
{{And his little girl watches him through the window}}
The gun is warm in his hands
As he stares at the latest victim
The sirens roar around him
And panic stricken, he runs again
{{He has to see her face, one last time}}
He walks in the house
And his little girl
Their little girl
is playing with her barbies
{{She has no idea, how much he loves her}}
Her mother looks up at him
Her baby blue eyes meet his own
He can't believe what he's done
{{And she smiles, because she still loves him}}
A contest entry
- Anyone? Anyone there [For anyone] by RawrSmileBabyPlz.
450 points, ended June 26, 2008, 36 entries
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Very interesting .Wow very well written i like it alot. I could picture all the different emotions as i read. Thanks for entering my contest. I wish you the best of luck.
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Very interesting .Wow very well written i like it alot. I could picture all the different emotions as i read. Thanks for entering my contest. I wish you the best of luck.
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Shelly..
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wow! this was very sweet and very touching at the end! a very deep poem filled with amazing emotions! wonderful imagery! >.< I love it! keep penning!
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oh my kayla, why is that the first poem i have come to read in ages is one so sad from you?
Why does the pain feel so palpable in your words (albiet perhaps it would be more potent if in rhyme or a meter) but i find it alluring and irresistable.
Why must you make my heart wrench so?
Bravo
A.S.
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Wow kayla...this is amazing...it proves that family is the strongest bond over anything...and that no matter what they will love you
Joe -
Very nicely written; took me a while to get the message, but I'm just dumb that way
I love it though, it's very emotional for both the guy and the mother.
-Jon
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