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Yellow Bloom

       Waves of buttercups
  shimmering as they
             dance on woven waves
of transpired vapor

 

 

 

 

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  • marlene47 silver member
    June 8, 2008

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    Such a beautiful image you describe, all breathy movement in a field of color. A fine entry.
    Marlene


    • tainfinite
      June 8, 2008
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      tainfinite

      thanks for your comment, yes it is nice and breathy i could really see this and feel, they dont always do both guess to many words lol


  • james119
    June 7, 2008
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    nice descriptives
    and it works so well


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    June 7, 2008
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    Deeply creative... x


  • Weltt
    June 7, 2008

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    Beautifully done!! another trophy here for sure. Although I do think it would read better as "woven" instead of "weaved" or perhaps switch "weaved" and "waves", but thats just my personal opinion. Best of luck in the contest!!


    • tainfinite
      June 7, 2008
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      taiinfinite

      thanks yes your right, school and i never met many times, and then mostly for lunch lol thanks for your help and comments

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