the quiet lane calls me again
with memories in sweet refrain
I’ve been away a thousand nights
old things now bring me new delights
tall grass and ancient flower bed
surrounding silvered tractor shed
sagging ridgepole and open door
give invitation to explore
rose and grapevine intertwining
beetles in the doorpost mining
inside - old baling implement
I study it to heart’s content
my fishing pole against the wall
stands unused since late that fall
rusted fence across the hollow
open field this year in fallow
maple stump with mosses growing
bits of stone for aimless throwing
lingering here by rippled stream
solitude weaves a pleasant dream
a pleasant dream
A contest entry
- Rhyme and Flow part 3 New - 50,000 points series by cricketjeff.
4000 points, ended June 15, 2008, 51 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Something To Divert Me (pre-writes allowed) by piccola.
700 points, ended June 27, 2008, 20 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - sprays of summer by hugs and kissies.
600 points, ended July 8, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - HOME by second-born.
1200 points, ended August 13, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
please give honest critique (constructive please :))
Comments
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"lingering here by rippled stream
solitude weaves a pleasant dream" ...so lovely and heartfelt...I really like your piece...you've woven such a dream of longingness of going back home...thank you for sharing this...
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this is such a lovely poem...the flow and the rhyme is carefully structured and written...and the content is sincerely from the heart...thank you for sharing it...
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beetles in the doorpost mining
inside - old baling implement I study it to heart’s content my fishing pole against the wall
stands unused since late that fall
this is fantastik
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Please God don't let this be a previous trophy winner ... I love this. Every line a winner and the ending is breathtaking. It is a great diversion and I want to put it in my list of favorites if that's ok?
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Thanks so much for the gold; I'm glad you appreciated this work so much.
Thanks for running this contest.
And yes, I feel honoured that you asked.
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Lovely imagery!
I imagined each scene before me as I read your lines. Wonderful rhyme and flow. Well done.
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Yes, a very pleasant dream, some nice images also! When I first started to read it,' I've been away a thousand nights, I thought you were arriving home after a stint in the military. nice poem
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A pleasant dream indeed and a lovely poem, great to see you entering regularly and we hope you continue to do so in later rounds both Sue and I enjoyed reading this
All the best,
Jeff
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love this.
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thanks
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