If you could listen, what you'd hear,
If you could listen, what you'd find,
If you could listen,
If you had vision, what you'd see,
If you had vision, what you'd watch,
If you had vision, you'd behold,
If you had vision, you would stare,
If you had vision, where you'd look,
If you had knowledge, what you'd get,
If you had knowledge, what you'd mind,
If you had knowledge, lore you'd know,
another to be finished
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Comments
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i think the constant repetition is a bit tiring but i think that its the backbone of the poem. You could possibly make a few changes to it, but other than tht i think its fine
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ooh a non-rhyming poem! yay! Good job on this. The repitition is a little tiring, but this is still a very good poem dear sister! Keep on writing <3
~ Bright Smyles
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