It seems the world can laugh and wear a smile,
While all I see is veiled in monochrome.
The rest of you are happy all the while,
Yet I just sigh and cry here in my home.
I cannot face the future without you
And yet it's certain that will be my fate.
The moment that you died I clearly knew
The rest of life would be the saddest wait.
But never pity me for I was raised
Much higher than the rest of you can see.
I would not have one whit of pain erased
For fear I would forget that you loved me.
I ran the race of life and won the gold,
You were the finest gift a man could hold.
Author notes
Kahlil Gibran “…a tear and a smile”
“I would not exchange the sorrows of my heart
For the joys of the multitude.
And I would not have the tears that sadness makes
To flow from my every part turn into laughter.
I would that my life remain a tear and a smile.”
In a list
A contest entry
- A Tear and a Smile - Winklings #93 by Winklings.
900 points, ended June 24, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A truly beautiful sonnet! The emotions are vivid and heartfelt. Congratulations on your well-deserved Gold!
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Technically a solid piece in rhyme and meter, the theme is well suited for the message of Gibran here; but what stands out to me is the passion of the writing, the sense of longing, somewhat rare in my experience to find sonnets that truly sing a song of someone's heart. Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK
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A beautiful sonnet. You took the prompt and made it your own. I don't consider this to be dark but in it's own way, very sad and poignant and you know how much I love the genre.
All the best in the contest
Me
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Your sonnets have improved so much and so quickly. I enjoyed this read and I think you should be proud of it. Bravo!
Love,
Amera
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wow I am not sure what to really say I have never read that form before and it was some thing that I wouldn't normally read I am more for dark poetry but I am glad I stepped out on a limb and read some thing new it was a little refreshing , I liked this poem I think you did a very good job on it
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I am glad you enjoyed it
I don't write dark very often but if you like the form of this I do have at least one dark piece in the same form
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4231279
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This was indeed a intense piece. Sad and painful to read. I wish you the best with this piece in the contest.
Love
Passions
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