I can remember when there was laughter we sat on the beach
Sun gleaming on me elegantly
Mom with her pearls
The happiness made us glow with love
Faith and trust is what we talked and believed
A rose falls it is over
Our happiness is gone where did it go?
What happened to the laughter why is it gone?
No more faith no glimpse of trust
No more vacations no beach no fun its gone faster than you believe
That was the past and so distant it was we don't even see the once beautiful sun cause we are alone and scared of what has happened.
A contest entry
- June New Members Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended July 5, 2008, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - "She Must Be The Saddest Girl To Ever Hold A Martini." by SliptheFlitch.
300 points, ended August 28, 2008, 17 entries
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Welcome to Allpoetry and thank you for entering the contest
This is quite foreboding. It holds a sense of pain and danger, particularly in the last line. To show that there has been so much pain that there is no way to look at it anymore without it hurting.
You must, however, add your option to the authors notes to ensure that you are following the rules correctly.
Welcome to allpoetry, I hope you enjoy the site
I wish you the best of luck in the contest
Miss Faerie
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This is absolutely incredible! I love the imagery, emotions, and the all around creativity in your poem. The only thing is you need to look at the rules and add your option into your author's notes. If you need help doing that, be sure to let one of us greeters know and we'd be happy to assist you! Thanks for your entry 
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memories are always sweet and they can carry us away.. yet at times, they ache. U have painted a beautiful picture.. Thanks for taking time to enter our contest..
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You have a well written and very emotional piece here. It is obvious you write what your heart speaks. Thank you for sharing and entering the contest. Don't forget to let us know your option!
Good luck.
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this is such a beautiful write, each line holds dedication and strength. as well as using a few of the prompts (As far as i can see anyway) you have used depth and an image that really helps the reader to vision the scene in their mind and it really did bring a smile to my lips.i thought this was stunning and captivating well done and best of luck to you
Charlotte
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You have expressed an deep inner emotion here; sorrowed in your words. I can almost see each line of this playing out like a clip of a movie reel. Well done.
Good luck to you in the contest.
Storm
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You've done a great job at expressing you inner feelings. A very sad poem here.
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Hi lilemo
Your poem is sad, sometimes remembering the past makes us long for it Hopefully things will be good again The last line leaves me wondering what has happened and of course im curious Wonderful poem you have penned Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
Barbara
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This is such a beautiful poem, so sad yet tender. Great imagery, wonderful job. One thing though, I think you should put the option number in your authors notes.
Thanks for your entry, and good luck!
Blessings,
~Michaela~
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