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A fairytail

This is a story of a prince,
who is trying to convince,
a pretty young girl,
with a head full of curl,
to give him a kiss,
so he can dismiss,
the suit of frog,
that has left his looks in a smog.

Finally the girl gives in,
and gives him a kiss on his chin,
the prince leaves his frog layer then,
never to see the green again.

The girl falls in love with the man,
and through the meadow they ran.

The ending is one of good,

not of some violence in the hood.

A contest entry

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  • Sunshine Princess
    June 14, 2008
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    I like your poem have a nice day


  • PhoenixFaith
    June 12, 2008

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    Hoodwinked

    This is really cute and the rhyme is flawless. Great job dear poet, I love this fairytale and I had fun reading it. Keep it up.

    Always write from the heart
    Never give up
    Kate


  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    June 12, 2008

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    Hoodwink!

    This is a good retelling of a fairy tale classic with modern accents. Good rhyme and flow, well done!

    You hand been Hoodwinked by the Poetic Bandits today because WE CARE!

    Dennis


  • Samcat
    June 8, 2008

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    That last line made me laugh! I love this poem! lol It's brillaint! The rhyming and flow are perfect as i think someone else has said! A great entry!
    Good Luck!
    x


  • Sharcu silver member
    June 8, 2008

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    I couldn't help but laugh at that end line there. Very hilarious. Once again, your rhyme and flow are incredibly perfect... a very wonderful improvement! At this rate you'll be better than me in a few weeks Awesome work again, Katie!


  • Darkwell
    June 8, 2008
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    LOL

    LOL


  • SpiritDarkmaiden
    June 7, 2008

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    Lmao. Hilarious, I loved it. Nice job and good luck in the contest!


  • Zenda-Lokki silver member
    June 7, 2008
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    Lol, this is sure to do well in the contest. Would get a trophy from me, I love it lol.

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