My heart stopped in an instant
I heard the ocean waves
As they ruptured
In to a collapsed rumble
Delicately fading to the shore
My body paralyzed
As my feet slowly sank
Deep into the blistering sand
As the sun penetrated my skin
Yet I’d forgotten the pain was there
Our eyes locked in fascination
With the desire to be close
As we both stood there
Utterly confined in that moment
Forgetting the world’s existence
Young souls all around
Partying, graduation had come
Pandemonium surrounded us
Yet we had lost touch with it
None of it mattered anymore
I heard the seagulls singing
The wind blowing my hair
Both of us still controlled
By the desire building up inside
But both too shy to convey
This lies as a beautiful memory
Stored away in my dreams
Untouched by reality
Explored by fantasy
Haunted by what could have been
Author notes
Option 13- MEMORIES
A contest entry
- A-Z Options, Come and See! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
700 points, ended June 16, 2008, 31 entries
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awww this is a beautiful memory...I wish I had a lot more memories like this, I really need to make some memories, me thinks so when I'm old, I can smile at my younger years, instead of weep.
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This is really beautiful. A wonderful memory. Nicely written.
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It's a beautiful moment when you are so caught up with someone that the world goes mute and all that you can hear is your heart singing..enjoy those fleeting moments..your words capture the bliss..
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Well written!
I'm happy that I checked it out. A very powerful write with strong imagery
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Wo-ow.
Wow.
You know, sometimes, I will tell the author what my favorite part of their poem was, and copy a stanza, but then I would have to copy this whole entire poem into this comment, and I'm certain that would be considered spamming. I love the beach setting, and how you're saying you locked eyes with that person, and how you felt at that exact moment, I mean, it's perfect, I'm TOTALLY bookmarking this.
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Thank you! I mean it was based off of something that really did happened... So it was easy to set it up, and just pull out everything I was feeling. I'm glad you liked it!!
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Beautiful read, thanks for sharing your thoughts.
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This was a very nice read thanks for sharing much luck in her contest.
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Very well put, but realize that true love is sorta like a crock pot, ya gotta let it steep on slow simmer for years sometime. and then comes the day you both lift the lid at the same time and the flavors overwhelm your soul...
then....there is love
where before it was raw infatuation
But yeah, sweet write...very
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