Beautiful

The beautiful creak,

that's what i seek,

wishing it was mine every day of the week.

Lots of thinks that I can remember,

dating all the way back to November,

even visualizing that hot ember.

My first kiss,

which was bliss,

with the sound of the night a gentle hiss.

Now the flowers bloom,

the sight holds no gloom,

they give off such sweet perfume.

All my friends are around,

stepping on the soft ground,

hearing the creak's magnificent sound.

A contest entry

WHAT DO YOU SEE? [2] by skylark anointed. 800 points, ended August 6, 2008, 22 entries
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skylark anointed
July 31, 2008
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I enjoyed reading your poem. Thank you for entering my contest!
Twinstar
June 12, 2008

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Hoodwink!!!
This seem like a wonderful place to go, I wish I could go there. Very nice job on this! Great imagery! and I so enjoyed reading this poem.

Love & Light
Debbera
Haiku-bless-you
June 12, 2008

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Hoodwink!
This is a nice peaceful write, a rememberance of pleasant days in the past. You have incorporated good imagery in sights and sounds. Good Job!

You have been Hoodwinked by the Poetic Bandits today because WE CARE!

Dennis
nature mithya
June 10, 2008
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excellent
A well balanced poem.
Sharcu
June 8, 2008

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In almost all my poetry I write with an AABB rhyme scheme. I like how you switched your style up here with the AAABBBCCC... Very well done, Katie!
Zenda-Lokki
June 7, 2008

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Great ryhme scheme here and you held it well throughout making the words flow off the readers tongue effortlessly. Good job x

My favourite part:
"All my friends are around,
stepping on the soft ground,
hearing the creak's magnificent sound."

Finished the poem perfectly x