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Setting Sun

The evening sun dappled a brilliant
show of light across the waters dark
Everything else was left in shadows,
reflected beauty of a sunset's trademark

Slowly fading beyond the horizon,
shadowed images decend into night
There, they would await a new day
until once again, the sun could ignite

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  • mcheadle
    December 18, 2008
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    I believe you must live near the water

    for only this is what one sees as we who have land to land as the sun comes up and sets in the evening. I remember this as I have visited in Flordia and remember the gulf as tehe sun went down. thanks for the memories. Merry Christmas to you and your family always...mac

    • jodygirl
      December 18, 2008
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      Thank you for your comments on this poem. However, I must admit that even though I DO live near a small lake in the foothills of the Adirondack Mountains, I have never actually been very close to either of the "Big Ponds" as some people call them. I love the tranquility of the waves and shadows of water. Thank you again for your kind words.


  • skylark anointed
    July 31, 2008
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    Lovely!

    You really captured the visual essence of the photograph. Thank you for your entry!

    • jodygirl
      August 1, 2008
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      Thank you so much for enjoying my poem. I'm sure it was your picture prompt that compelled me to write the words. Your contest was very enjoyable.
      Joan


  • myron silver member
    June 28, 2008

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    You have emplyed an interesting set of images in this poem, Joan.
    I like poems like this because they concentrate on the poetry of the lines rather than overt feelings and thoughts.

    Nicely done,
    myron.

    • jodygirl
      June 28, 2008
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      Thank you for your comments on this poem. One can but hope for a good one. But, I must admit, the picture prompt is what really pulled this one out of the hat for me. Maybe I just need more hats???
      Joan


  • Kelli Marie
    June 7, 2008

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    Oh, this is just beautiful Joan. Graceful and beautiful. Very well written. I hope it does well in the contest.
    Kelli

    • jodygirl
      June 8, 2008
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      Hi Kelli Marie; I'm so glad you liked my poem. This one is a little different than what I usually do, but It seems to have worked. Thanks.

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