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Elemental spell.....

O wind,
burst into gale,
throw me around from place to place,
break my bones on every face.
O gentle rain,
burst into flood,
wash my broken body away,
keep me in the sea,
where I drown.
O healing earth,
split apart and swallow my remains,
deep inside you,
let me stay.
O fire,
deep inside the earth,
swallow what's left of me,
let it destroy me.

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  • Broken Angel Shade gold member
    June 7

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    This really conveyed a great deal of emotions. I really did like this a great deal. You did a good job with this it is so like WOW and emotional. I could feel the raw feelings of the healing powers of the earth, I could feel the wind gale. I felt all of this deeply Great write

  • Bean Sidhe gold member
    June 7

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    Wow! First of all, I love the word "elemental" because it conveyes such power and intensity. I really liked the way you formatted this work from beginning to end. But the part relating to the earth specifically stands out for me. "split apart and swallow my remains" refers to death & interment, perhaps? or maybe just the act of returning from that which we are made...I do believe you have created something here to challenge your reader and make them think. Quite an accomplishment, I feel! Bravo!