I feel your sleeping breath upon my skin
A kind of gentle sigh that draws me in
And then it's in my ear, that leads to sin
I love your life
Relaxing by your side, we lie and sigh
Your breathing moves your chest to catch my eye
An idea in my mind that starts to fly
I love your life
You whisper words of love that I can hear
I breathe a soft response that draws you near
The way you move your arms it's very clear
You love my life
But now I have to wait and lie in hope
I can only throw a line and hold the rope
To try to help you live we have to cope
So fight for life!
A contest entry
- Quickie Quote Prompt # 6 by BluesMan.
875 points, ended July 16, 2008, 32 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Poignant, gentle and beautiful.
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Wonderful imagery It made me feel the love and the pain Beautifuly written Thank you for entering my contest
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I likey
Nice work with the three-line then singlet. It was effective. And the imagery was good too. Nice poem.
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Beautiful my friend.
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Without hope where would we all be? Amazing and so full of hope write. I so enjoyed reading good luck in the contest
Theresa
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And you have definately thrown the rope to me several times. These past few months have been heel for me. I hate these treatments and even hated life at times yet you make me see that its worth being....Keep hold of the rope..and as whipsered many times...please dont let me go.
I love you
Passionspromise
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very moving, thought provoking...
I like the 3 lined rhyme with the shorter fourth line almost repeated in each verse. It gives the poem a unique quality and adds to the imagery you describe so well.
The poem leaves me feeling a sad peace...which is a bit of a paradox, but it is nice to be unusual for a while.
Richard
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Love is the greatest healer of all and can move mountains.With this kind of love there is always hope.I really liked this one Jeff, Ros
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