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Lost

Lost is the youth
in this world of glamour
Lost is the youth
to really bother

Late night parties
Fast-track lives
Too busy to sit back
and think twice

Lost in their own
so ''cool'' worlds
to busy to think about
their elders.

Champagne bottles
flowing here and there
smoke of cigarette
blurring the stare

Devouring humanity
Killing sensitivity
Putting an end to
natural creativity

Lost in the worlds
of stress and tension
They want Achievement
They want Fun!!!
Living in spotlight
Dying for Lime-Light


Author notes

my first completely "MATURE" poem!!!

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  • cupcakealia
    February 5
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    hmmmm


  • Violinstrings silver member
    February 1

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    good rhythm

    this is well done decribing adult life from your point of view , champagne bottle here and there
    smoke of cigarettes blurrs the stare
    good technigue of rhyme

  • karatekid
    January 10

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    Too Ture Too True

    this is ture for all teenagers i think that this is a very good poem and one day it will be a good book for all teenagers to read


    Love Always
    karatekid


  • xXxPeachesxXx
    July 9, 2008
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    WoW that was really good and i liked it keep writing too and thanks


  • LuminousKiss
    June 7, 2008
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    Wow this is very good! Lovely imagery! You are very mature for your age.


    • Mekhala
      June 9, 2008
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      Thankyou so much!!! I am glad you liked it...


  • averyb
    June 7, 2008
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    I really like your poem. It was good for you first mature poem.

  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    June 7, 2008

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    sad but good

    Wow Mekhala does this evolve from life at your boarding school? Sounds like it to me. I'm sorry things aren't so well for you right now. I'm sure in time things will get better. Just be the best you can be. I love you. Uncle Brian

    • Mekhala
      June 9, 2008
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      Thanks uncle...Well, I thought about it in school only...things are okay for me...its just a general thing...actually, I was quite put off with the things happening lately, like people getting drunk and driving late-night and having accidents, and then people chucking out there own ones out of their houses for some lame reason, people getting frustrated and ending up doing weird stuff...i mean...instead of getting up and doing something good that would make a difference to the world...the youth today is going crazy and is landing up doing something insane that would only cause some sort of proble...i just hope things improve!!!
      Thanks for your comments!
      love you too,
      Mekhala.

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