You ask me why should you believe?
My answer is for you to breathe
the breath of life that feeds us all
To give you hope, however small.
Whilst breathing in, believe it's true,
A new found faith with breathe with you;
To lift you from your deep despair
and ride upon a sea of air.
You asked me why should you believe?
You're smiling now as you recieve,
the gift of promise in one breath,
to blow away the stench of death.
A contest entry
- Quickie Quote Prompt # 6 by BluesMan.
875 points, ended July 16, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is lovely. I think you meant "will" instead of "with" in Line 6. The last three words are a bit of a kick in the teeth. "stench" and "death" shock the reader back but the rest of the poem glows with a wonderful sense of hope and comfort. Well done with this. God bless!
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This is a very inspiring and uplifting take on the prompt Thank you for entering my contest
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good one
Oh I like this poem! First of all it rhymes. And it is well written, clear, and easy to find the rhythm. Good work!
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ohhh lovely, i really like it, Good Day
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Wow such emotion and vivid imagery! Very spiritual I so enjoyed reading wonderful take on the prompt. Good luck in the contest
Theresa
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wonderful flow and rhyme.
Congratulations on a poem with a lot of feeling and emotion. It is a great tribute to Jesus and an inspiration to the reader.
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this poem gave me great hope. thanks for sharing. best of luck in the contest!
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believing is such a positive attribute ,and i believe this will win xx peter
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My mom helped me read this and I like how it gives you hope and a belief in faith.
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uplifting
enjoyed very much the 'breath of life that feeds us all'
No matter how you see it this can only be true. wrapped up nicely. Loved it
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As the wind moves through the trees, so the spirit of God breathes through us all, unseen, yet its effects evident among us! Beautiful poem...inspiring! I love the idea of breathing, how, once we give that final exhale, the life departs. It is the breath of God that circulates around us and moves through us and sustains us. This little poem leaves me with much to ponder, and I thank you for it. Aloha, friend. Hear my music at www.nakedadam.net
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I don't have to believe to appreciate the flow and beauty, lovely poem, I never expect less however
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