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Our Universe

seeds

dropped, sinking
mingling
beneath the sun lit soil

cracking from inside
tearing upward though tender
against gravity
singing

prolific voices,
petals

upon pale green stalks
cupped chocolate cosmos

count this multitude
with your fingertips

its positive spatial curvature
and informal carapace –

the shape of our universe


and touch

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  • LadyLavender silver member
    June 18, 2008

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    Deep, yeap and I like it!

    Profound, in every sense of the word! Words elegant...and what it evoked, inspiration.

    Loved it!

    Thank you for entering.