I wondered what to do with it
the dolly that did lie or sit
upon my chair so still and sad
can life be really gravely bad?
It seemed to me it had no arms
to give a lift to lifeless charms
the hair was flat and sticky-out
and on its lips a tasteless pout
Who put it there I cannot guess
but now my life is in a mess
for people passing by might see
a girl just "open-armed" for me
Author notes
Prompt: 3- this pic: credit:SENSUAL - Lux by =onewordphoto
A contest entry
- Variety by luna-midnight.
1000 points, ended June 14, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Nice write. I've been reading through some of your work and I'm enjoying the perspectives. I really likd the rhyming and rhythm here, as well as the story being told.
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Flows along quite well and the rhyme is pretty damn good too....I think it is a well constucted poem...Myabe its just me and I see darkness everywhere but there does seem to be a dark subtle undertone....dolls are a bit scary...Solid write
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I guess this is one of my few "dark" bits. The prompt was a strange black and white photo that looked to me like a doll rather than a person. That spurred me into what I don't normally produce. PS Didn't win - heehee.
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this is funny, hahaha, love it, very unique, great write and good luck, thanks fr entering
take care
stephanie
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