Your hands reminded me of perfection;
left me starving for the nightmares of winter
where frost-bitten hearts refused the sun.
Await the approach of [Andromeda],
and you stared up at me with emptiness in your eyes.
That night I slept under your collar bone
where it was safe and warm.
The dreams your breath carved into my neck were
better than promises of happiness.
Author notes
#4...twilight!
[mainly inspired by edward cullen himself. =D]
stephenie meyer ftw!
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Comments
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The brackets around "Andromea" seem more of a distraction than a help.
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my brackets on allpoetry were originally just italics...but i can't use it on here as i am not a paying member.
i will try to leave them out in future, if they are distracting.
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Very unique poem .. thanks for entering it in my contest, good luck
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unique expression . . liked "I sleptunder your collar bone" and "The dreams your breath carved into my neck" . . nice take
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i like the image of sleeping under "your collar bone" it's a creative way to bring the emotion across. i enjoyed the breath/carving image as well, brought the piece to a good close.
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whoa. that was like. beautifuly sad to me. i dont know if thats how i was ment to take it but i did. i loved this write. great job!!!
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Positivly BEAUTIFUL! The image painted in my mind is just wonderful. I can see Edward in this piece.
Thank you for your entry.
Good job and good luck!
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That was just beautiful... I can feel this poem... Loved it... you are very good... bravo...
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arigato! =]
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