Teach me how to numb my pain,
to still the heart that shivers,
my tears will fall like acid rain,
to drown me in their rivers.
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ohgoshogosh...sorry can't help. I think this is how I exactly I feel.
when hearts are like this...ahhh!
I love the emotions, succinct yet with so much impact!
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so much emotion in so few words...a sign of excellent poetry.....
I love this..
Lynda
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nice but short
Although nice as it is now I think it would make for a wonderful beginning to a longer write perhaps...just my opinion. -
wooow
well said! i enjoyed it very much
good luck to you my friend
juliet
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that's cool sounding ^^
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This is a very profound piece. It makes one wonder what has caused this pain you speak of... I agree, it flows beautifully. The comparison of tears like acid rain is simply brilliant, and impacting upon the poem.
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omg..I loved that!!!! I can feel the emotions with some sweet pain..I do love it!
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i really like this, but i am unable to pinpoit my reason for liking it. this is definitely one of those poems that i am going to have to read at a later date to get a better understanding of it. it seems like there are more lines on the page then there actually are, thats what drew me to this poem. i will read this later and comment again when i have a better understanding.
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Flows like a river...
nay like a stream...
a sweet lyric...
Beautiful!
Galaxy2
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Oops
Hehe. I meant to put the little clapping smiley faces
XD
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Wow
4 lines, but absolutely amazing. It takes me many more lines than 4 to explain or show my pain, but as short as this is, you did a wonderful job showing yours.
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interesting, but it fell kinda short to me.
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wowwww how powerful could 4 lines be truely awesome,strong,marvelouss
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Very touching camus. I know your hurting right now. I am only an IM away.
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*hugs* it'll be okay, things will work out
im here for you
great write, very painful.
take care
stephanie
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You can learn from me - I'll teach you! I have a fee though and it's pretty expensive and kind of .. let's just say I'm pretty insane, haha.
As for your poem - I don't think I have ever read one of yours that I don't enjoy. This was short, but really rich in its gathering. An excellent work, again!
♥
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Ooh...a rhyming one. I'm impressed.
It's short but as always very powerful.
We should talk later. Great poem my friend
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