he wants me to bite
but is it right when all i can see
is the blue in his eyes
my soul floating in his sea
he smells so good, like spring
i feel like running through his hair
his love the notes i sing
my soul drifting on a wing
i can feel his mind
into his eyes i look
for the lust of this moment
i pull away or be lost forever
my soul gliding in the never
weak i turn back to his glance
the straight in his stance
he rushes to my center
i fold his lips to mine
my soul beckons him to enter
like a feather through the wind
emotions move within
the taste of his skin, sweet
his pulse rushes me to taste
my soul, complete
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A contest entry
- who you love by Merciful-Manner.
431 points, ended June 7, 2008, 31 entries
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625 points, ended July 12, 2008, 76 entries
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500 points, ended July 30, 2008, 132 entries
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375 points, ended July 24, 2008, 14 entries
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Comments
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this..felt..magical.
wow.
leaves me pretty speachless, its so beautiful... i cant find the words i was going for tho.
its....great
i love it
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this has a lot of great imagery. running through his hair is visual; the way he smells is auditory ... it appeals to all of the senses. nice job, thank you for the entry
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This was really beautiful... I love all the descriptions you've written here, such great imagery:
"i feel like running through his hair
his love the notes i sing
my soul drifting on a wing"
are my favorite lines. Thanks for entering... only this wasn't exactly what I was looking for in my contest... more of a 'peace on earth' kind of thing, not romance. But thanks for entering anyway, because this is a beautiful and I'm glad I got to read it.
Shya -
this is very sweet. I like how some words are in different tenses and out of the ordinary. I also like how you end it with the word complete. Thanks for entering.
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Thanks for entering this into my contest. I liked the use of similies, and it flowed well. I wish you much luck.
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this was a beautiful poem! great job! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox
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WOW! I REALLY REALLY REALLY like this piece of work!
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so beautiful....amazing...great flow
i loved it!
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