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letting words
within phrases
of tears
run through
track and fields
may leave you
emptier
than empty
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Author notes
17 words
A contest entry
- Dry Eyes by Lavender Butterfly.
410 points, ended June 7, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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congrats, excellent, Hensley...
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Congratulations, cleverly penned as usual.
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Very creative and deeply expressive.... x
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Ooh, sounds trophy-worthy and I mean it!!
"run through tracks and fields"
How cleverly phrased...
"may leave you"
I like this careful phrasing--it's like a warning with the use of the word 'may'.
The entire poem has perfect flow--the lines are separated at just the right sequences...good luck and I'd wager on a Gold or Silver!!
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A very moving piece....i guess the only good thing about "dry eyes" is that the emptiness allows us to be filled again... Lovely - and so much said in just 17 words.
~ Nicolette
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