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Desolate

dreams left
squeezed deep holes dry
perceived is perceiver's image
spring wore deserted mask
inside transferred empty

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  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    June 7, 2008
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    Very creative and extremely imaginative... x


  • notorious
    June 7, 2008

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    "perceived is perceiver's image"
    Brilliant phrase...makes me think of Shakespeare, who I hate, but this time in a good context...Makes me think of "To be or not to be", actually.

    "spring wore deserted mask"
    Nice imagery here--it's very rich.

    Good luck in the contest--it's very descriptively written and full of intrigue, so you should place something!