kiss me, fxck me, forget about ten minutes ago.
I'm sorry I failed you love, it's just
the hospital's caught my {wandering.glitter} eyes again.
and this food's caught in my throat
{{in answer to your but.why.is.it.falling.apart.now question: yes, it is
too much to ask.}}
it's like that night i told you i was [yours.forever].
as long as you'd hold me,
as long as you'd want me, i'd
keep my body pressed against yours and my gaze pinned on that {sexy.dark} waiter over there
[[with a sexy shudder, I'd sigh as I lay in his scarred arms]]
I never meant to hurt you;; I'd never want to do that. So try to stay relaxed while I b.r.e.a.k. you every night I *just be myself*
and
stop noticing every time my hips brush against your friends,
‘cause I'd h.a.t.e. for you to feel u s e d .
the.feeling's.mutual, sweetie,
do I still owe you [[something]]?
seen what you've done to my wrist
<3lately?
{{i did it just for you, i promise...
isn't that what you always wanted?}}
Author notes
Hope this is okay for your contest
Explanation because I'm not sure how clear the actual theme is and don't want it to seem like a mix of random dp images.
Theme is, kinda, relationships... a girl who's unable to commit herself fully to the guy she's with, unable to give up parts of her life for him when he asks her to: she flirts with his friends, can't keep her eyes off every hot guy in the room... can't solve her issues (eating disorder) for this guy. In short, other parts of her life win out. And that's "why it's all falling apart now": "yes, it is too much to ask."
<3
In a list
A contest entry
- dIrTy PrEtTy by poetrytoopeneyes.
600 points, ended June 15, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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dont you hate the food at mental hospitals?
Its always cold.
ha good writing tho i like it -
Yeah, I liked the theme. Something you portrayed really well. I liked your use of dirty pretty, not an overkill. "yes, it is too much to ask." Great answer there, unique. Good write.
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I'll be honest, I'm not too fond of the whole dirty pretty theme, but this was pretty decent. A lot of emotion, nice work and keep it up.
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