Looming against the blank curtain,
soft, unconscious moaning erupts.
Within my ribcage, a ticking, tick tick,
corrupts.
"Now you love and hate your mother, she's bound
and out for you, you've closed your heart to her,
that's not something good little girls
do"
This dead life and living death, corroded with
stains of breath; gurgling bile and
Oedipelian myth manifests.
Wasteland.
"Attached to your cold, beating heart, there is a key. To your left
a dazzling razor smiles: will you give the key to your heart
to save mother's life, or tear out the womb which you
revile?"
Shivering, sweating blood and tears, the
culmination of my worst fears, trading or
executing my own life for theirs: why family?
Torn.
"Between Mother's hips, there is also a key
that will end her pain and your misery, she will die
and you will live, but is a second birth really hers to
give?"
The first birth was hers alone, and I remember her
gift of life: why can't I pay back in my own blood
the dreams she sacrificed?
"You have sixty seconds to choose: do it, or else
the arsenic and nutmeg fluid, will course
through her veins, your own mother you will have
slain."
Glancing again at the razor, I hastily scraped
deep into the left of my chest for the key to
excavate.
My own life gathered in puddles, as I lurched
my offering to her: a gore-caked hand that
trembled,
as I exhaustedly crawled to the door. The key slipped
through wet red fingers-- an ominous buzzer growled; My
vision
blurred, hazing into oblivion, the rasping curtain
became a dirty shroud, as the clattering key was lost- a
voice:
"Sixty seconds are up, you and mother will have
both died today: she loved you more than you hated her,
and she gave herself up for you, that your life you would not have
to pay..."
Author notes
OPTION 2.
The indented dialogue in quotes is the voice speaking to me. The flushed lines are my internal struggles (literally) as well as a explication of the plot.
Hope you enjoyed the Ironic ending.
You wake up from a drugged sleep, only to find yourself trapped in a room you've never seen before. You're trapped in a device, or a situation, that exploits your worst fears. Then suddenly, a tape starts to play in front of you. You see a clown mask, and a deep, sadistic voice speaks...
"Hello [insert your name]. I want to play a game..."
Why has the Jigsaw killer chosen you? What device are you trapped in? What's going through your mind? Do you escape, or do you add to the growing list of the Jigsaw victims?
A contest entry
- I want to play a game... by Aeris Silverlight.
500 points, ended June 13, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Critique Please! Be Ruthless! I Like It Rough!
Comments
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I'm just...speechless. The language, the poetic devices, the description, the raw, unadulterated talent. The ending left me amazed, the twist was very ingenious and original. This is a very good poem, and I'm positive it will amaze a lot of poems. Thank you for entering!
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Wow, that's very sad... But also pretty fricken' cool. Good ideas and very good write! Good luck in the contest!


