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Masked

Reality hidden behind a sparkling sapphire mask
Jewel-encrusted lips puckered round the flask
Mystery

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I chose the picture...

A contest entry

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  • Crazy Coconut
    July 19, 2008
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    lovely imagery, 15 words spoke a lot congrats on the Hm


  • deadpixie020
    July 13, 2008

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    Those two lines are fantastic. The last line kind of takes away from the general effect, for me, because I'm not entirely sure what its point is... Maybe if it were a whole line instead of just a word. But I guess that was the prompt. I like how it can be so short but at the same time so powerful. You've got a gift, my friend.


  • TyrannyForestFairy
    July 2, 2008

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    simply beautiful through its brief lines. pretty descriptive words used within this piece and a nice rhyme incorporated. good job


  • Desire gold member
    June 10, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: Masked
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I did several times~ after inhaling Your words, I kept seeing Kirsten Gum from Cash and Treasures~ and a reference to cherry and then vanilla- Wild as it sounds...also was getting word: Stubborn-
    reference to chores- and phrase: do what You need to do also words: Get the job done
    Nudged to mention~ follow Your Dream even though others may question- it is like You harbor the answer and had all along I kept seeing New Orleans and Mardi Gras
    Hopefully that makes sense
    Powerful images You have brought forth

    These words grabbed and pulled~
    ...puckered round the flask
    Beautiful Voice spoken~

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • movedon
    June 7, 2008

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    Hey sister!

    This poems is very good. I like shorter poems before they can pack so much more emotion in fewer lines than a lengthy poem. Be proud of this sweetie, it's really good!

    Mylee


  • The Otep
    June 7, 2008
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    Just beautiful darling!!


  • grannyeri gold member
    June 6, 2008

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    Interesting to use that rhyme in so few lines - works well here. So many different ways to interpret this picture prompt.

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