(ever changing, ever flowing)
"Why are you moving there?"
(like it's all knowing)
(almost like it doesn't care...)
"Are you sure it's all there?"
"Are you going now?" (off to see your dreams?)
(dreams, smile, vacant stare...)
(try not to scream)
(because life's a regret)
is life misleading, or "Are you [always a stray]?"
(that no one ever forgets)
"Have you run away?"
(lost inside, but not on the out)
"Can we help you?" (what's this here?)
people don't care, not about (you) shout)
(life is blurry, never so clear)
so "Why are you here?" lost in this crowd-
(whispering memories of moments gone)
(thinking out loud)
not "Everyone is strong."
"You're (not) going to be okay,"
(because life is a death sentence)
everyone "-has to pay,"
(can you live a life of pentence?)
of "-pain," regret, and "-hospitals?"
(people watching you through glass)
have you "-lost it all?"
(why are you always last?)
left to "-struggle for air..."
(like its only you who suffers, what for?)
"No one is (ever) there..."
(now is the end of our tour)
A life "-broken..." and "-shattered..."
(is there anything that matters?)
[not anymore]
(life isn't worth fighting for)
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Author notes
Sonthing so random I almost don't understand it myself, but there is a stroy hidden here, if you look hard enough.
~i am nothing yet i still am~
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i caught the story line and the screwy style adds to the garbled thoughts of the mind, but good gracious girl it was a bit of a headache to read with all the variations in sentence structure, anti-structure, () and "" not to mention the random words added in here and there....but oddly enough the story was kind of clear to spite all of that...if you have some time on your hands you might like Tripmaster Monkey by Maxine Hall Kingston; it's not my cup of tea, but you seem a bit more into the post-modern scene then i am. love and
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Thankies mommie.
I'm glad you got it and liked it, sorry it was hard to read, I was afreid of that and there was a lot of editing done to it to make it easier. It was much more complex before. I put the spaces to give the reader a break, to think or to reread when they realised the message. Thanks for the comment and the suggestion, I'll definitely look him up when I have a minute.
jan
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girl you have out done yourself on this one. its kinda a sad poem to me, but it is VERY well written. the story is great. keep it comin
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Thanks. I wasn't sure if anyone would see the story, but I'm glad you liked it.
jan
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This is a great poem, I do not quit get it, but you are right there is a story in it. If you look hard enough there is a story in everything. Tramendous work, keep it up.
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Thank you, don't worry if you don't see it, it's kinda crazy hidden in there. Thanks again.
jan
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