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breathing your air

your everything i've wanted
everything i need.
you've made my life worth living
you make me never want to leave

and when i breathe your air,
its like our worlds are one
and it gives me that feeling
that your worth everything
i've ever done.

its like having no air
when you are not by my side
i can't really breathe at all
if i'm not breathing your air.

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  • BluesMan gold member
    July 16, 2008
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    Bravo young poet a beautiful poem you have written here Nice rhyme and flow Keep penning you have talent Thank you for entering my contest


    • wondering.willow
      July 16, 2008
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      thanks. i appreciate it
      sorry it wasn't exactly what you were looking for,
      but i am so glad you enjoyed it :]

      thanks again, abbey joy<3


  • thejollytinker
    July 15, 2008
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    Who hasn't felt that?

  • Poemdancer
    July 14, 2008

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    Interesting write, and a great idea. Strong emotions are portrayed. Good write, good luck in the contest.


  • MikeNoxaura
    July 14, 2008
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    Michelle Branch, eat your heart out

    could be an awesome song with more words. Nice, brief, and to the point. Like it!


  • Lonely Christina
    June 9, 2008
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    reminds me of "no air" by chris brown and jordan sparks lol good job its so sweet
    xoxo-christina


  • Sandygram silver member
    June 8, 2008

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    Lovely Words

    You have penned a very lovely poem. A pleasure to read this morning. Keep writing!! You take care.

    Bless You,
    Sandy


  • faithwhisperer silver member
    June 6, 2008
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    how lovely of a sentiment to think of breathing in someone else's air...


  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    June 6, 2008
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    a wonderful thought....

    ...in the last two lines, you have paid an ultimate compliment.

    May I suggest that 'your' = you're and its = it's [both times]

    I ;ike this poem a lot because it reflects a very feeling love and when you say, "it's like our worlds are one," I feel the emotion you write. Well done.


  • tawk gold member
    June 6, 2008

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    What a beautiful love poem, amazing imagery and emotions. I so enjoyed reading. Good luck in the contest Theresa

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