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Lungs

As long as one can inhale the wind

to feel its flavor of change

sweep in steady streams through the soul

causing visions of more than storms,

then the heart shall drip in light

and sense rainbows after sorrow’s clouds.

 

Walk the valleys of travail

with steps unceasing

exhale despair

while inhaling the scent of faith

flowing from inspiration’s incense .

 

For though discouragement’s stench wanes

the muscles of resolve,

inhaling the oxygen

of pure clarity in expectancy

gives a rush to the body,

a surge in  the flaming adrenaline of hope

so no desert crossed,

no enemy’s shadow faced

will become an dreaded

epitaph to fear.

 

Lungs that taste the air

in anticipation of being refreshed and strengthen

bear the whiff’s of destitution,

but never let them cripple the journey.

 

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The Prompt:

Where there's breath...There's hope!

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  • BluesMan gold member
    July 14, 2008
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    This is a very deep and moving piece of writing Thank you for entering my contest


  • faithwhisperer silver member
    June 6, 2008
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    Lovely indeed, Penman!!


  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    June 6, 2008

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    Wonderful imagery...

    ...in this well written poem. I enjoyed it all, but the last verse is magnificent in form and meaning.

    You have written about both sides of the coin with the "good' winning in the end.

    You have succeeded well with the vocabulary and the pictures you draw are life like and vivid.


  • StarEyes
    June 6, 2008

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    Bubs,

    This is beyond amazing!! What a great job you did on this one! The images this played in my mind as I was reading, is nothing short of miraculous!! What a beatiful read!!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • tawk gold member
    June 6, 2008

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    Wow this is amazing! Such amazing imagery and emotions. A wonderful take on the prompt. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest Theresa

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