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To My G

I can't help

but melt around you.

 

You are only yourself,

and I am only me.

 

That suffices

for the both of us.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • MissSmiles
    June 11, 2008
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    i think its perfect ; )


  • individuality gold member
    June 6, 2008

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    a good piece of poetry which flows smoothly, though that first verse is a little awkward with -

    I can't help
    but melting around you

    it might be better saying melt.