impending storm nears
explosion on horizon
manic depressive
Author notes
Some have a strike against them from the day they are born. Living with bi-polar disorder is not easy for any one.
A contest entry
- haiku deathmatch by Bosky.
820 points, ended June 7, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Prewrites From June 2008 by amaranthine lover.
1100 points, ended July 30, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
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Please tell me what you think
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Brief!
I missed it for a moment -too simple! For what it is worth, I have long believe that various conditions -Autism/Asbergers notably - must have been necessary for man to evolve. Perhaps the same is true of bi-polar. I have written a poem about mental illness or disorder.
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Love good haiku
and I understand bi-polar. First time, that I've seen these two brought together. Yes, the A-ha moment is quite an explosive storm.
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Too Good!
One of the very best A-ha moments I've ever had. You have expressed BPD so magnificently! Truly amazing. the last line was an excellent end. Awesome Haiku!!
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This is wayyyy impressive. I think the shortest piece I have yet to receive for this contest series and it still amazes me how well you all can write!
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I have seen this wih friends
I so felt for my friends and in knowing their conditions were forgiven time and time again when they turned on me and I took it for I knew it wasnt forever and I loved them so .
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i know this feeling all too well. i have never seen manic depression explained so very well in so few words. perfectly done. thank you for sharing this with me today. i may have to use your definition to explain to a few people what it is like to be me. viyanna rosemarie *HUG*
p.s. congratulations on the silver trophy! well done and much deserved.
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I especially love the last line of this. Your syllable didn't seem forced, which is great in a haiku. I love how you described the disease as a metaphor in the first two lines.
Very well written. I loved it.
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I know of someone with this condition. It is hard, very hard. I like the way you have described this within your piece. Anticipation of violence then the explosion. Yes, you have described this to a 't'. Well done.
With
Dark
Wishes.
Wayne Leon
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I knpw someone who has bipolar disorder. He is hard to be friends with. When he is in a good mood, he can be a friend. Yet, we get into arguments and he blame me for the argument. He never takes responsibility for himself. Everything is the other person's fault
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