As the soul reaches the pinnacle of suffering
and the heart stares aimless, looking for where to go
as the mind shuts down to all rational thought
seeking the comfort of an alter ego
When pain and anguish have worked their crippling spell
when desire has lost all hope
when love has turned to haunt you
and it is only but sorrow, with whom the heart elopes
When all those you care for, seem to be perfect strangers
when time is only made of faces from the past
when life seems like a cage, its walls falling in
and turns to pitch black at last....
A contest entry
- Darkness.....whatever...as dark as you can make it PW allowed by XXxXBassMeisterxXxX.
366 points, ended July 2, 2008, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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It was a good write. I had a few problems getting emotionally involved with it thbe first read through infortunately. Overall super job. It expresses such true bitter pain.
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oh my god, this was fantastic. i loved every part of it, especially the ending with the "..."s. It made it seem not quite finished, slightly haunting... great write!
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a good piece of poetry, suffering - i think it is productive in life though it is a painful thing, it does help us move along the course of life. everything has a purpose.
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