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God's Domain

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There is a peace in nature,

Often we don't see.

A sense of knowing, of creation,

Existing just to be.

 

They have no thoughts to weigh them down,

They leap, they run, they soar.

They are content with what they have,

They do not want for more.

 

Their nature is like a breeze,

Swift and light and free.

They do not struggle to survive,

They exist, only to be.

 

So when my mind is full of thoughts,

And overwhelmed with stress

I simply walk in God's domain.

It puts my mind to rest.

 

 

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  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    July 16, 2008
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    Thank you for your beautifully spoken entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • satan-
    July 12, 2008

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    Beautiful...! I can see it very clearly in my mind... This poem just takes me to my happy place and really puts my mind at ease. The soft flowy words are very soothing.. . Wonderful job! thanks for entering!


  • who iam
    July 10, 2008

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    A true appreciation of God's creatures

    Very well expressed:they have no thoughts to weigh them down...they are content with what they have...
    Beautifully done.


  • AAA Taurus The Bull gold member
    July 9, 2008
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    Very Good

    I enjoyed it very much its was very good and exciting piece of work. What you are saying about nature is right loved it. Great picture! i am looking forward to future to more of yours . There was no error. No typos. Nothing to change. I look forward to your next write


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    June 30, 2008

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    Ah...lovely!

    Thanks for this wonderful write! Yes, nature exists with the conditions The Creator set it in [outside of we humans mucking it up of course] & there's nothing to soothe the mind more that to drink in the tranquility of it! I love the continuity of this piece, how you talk us through & then end with a walk in His domain. Glad you won Silver. You deserved it!


  • TwilaTarragon
    June 24, 2008

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    Great Job! I love your rhyme in it, you did a good job of not having the rhyming sound forced which is really hard to do (for me at least). This is a really great write. Thanks for entering and Good luck!!

    -Twila


  • Candy6
    June 11, 2008
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    Great write. You rhymed this poem good.

  • darrylblacksr
    June 8, 2008
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    Wow! I simply love this: So when my mind is full of thoughts, And overwhelmed with stress
    I simply walk in God's domain.
    It puts mind my to rest. That's the truth for God takes care of the animals, he'll definitely take care of his children...
    Good luck and God Bless...


  • Providence
    June 8, 2008
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    "So when my mind is full of thoughts,

    And overwhelmed with stress

    I simply walk in God's domain.

    It puts my mind to rest."

    Wonderfully stated. There is a serenity in Nature that mankind has not been able to reproduce, bottle and sell!

    Bravo!

    Marianne

  • goalsv
    June 6, 2008

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    Amen to that, a wonderful piece showing that if God takes care of the animals, how much more will he take care of us.


  • ourgirlFriday
    June 6, 2008

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    I like it!

    How does the bible verse go? "See the sparrows in the field...even your Heavenly Father feeds and cares for them so." It's beautiful, really it is. Keep on penning!

  • Ace - LightWithinMe
    June 6, 2008

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    Hello Pisces Rainbow.

    A serene piece. There is a fine equilibrium in nature, which although does fluctuate, it does bring itself back into alignment. Peaceful vibes from this piece.

    My regards.


  • B Chandler
    June 6, 2008
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    Nice write but which quote was you inspired by again?


  • Olivias Violin
    June 6, 2008

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    Thank you so much for sending this poem

    Some of my favorite lines are: "Existing just to be...
    They are content with what they have.."

    and the photo is wonderful!


  • Poetry-and-rhyme
    June 6, 2008

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    auntiee this is simpllly adorable i simply walk in GOd's domain it puts my mind to restwowww it really does indeed
    i adore this poem auntie GOd bless you sweetness
    simple no comment other than AWESOME

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