Today I wake
to find the soul my body releases.
Tomorrow I'll wake
when angels cry and my life ceases.
Broken and scattered
is my love and my dreams.
Bleeding and jaded
is my body and my soul.
Pick up my pieces,
make me whole.
Author notes
Probably not any good.
Hope it at leasts get some kudos.
A contest entry
- please solve me... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended June 20, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
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Very nice. I love it because it's short yet gives a great impact.
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"Pick up my pieces,
make me whole", I adore this ending. Its so painful, but yet beautiful.
All the best,
Sammie
xox -
-grabs the glue-
>< Don't be mad if I put you back together wrong...
I failed anatomy class...
-glues arm to forehead-
Oops.
=] I love this poem.
And, I love you.
You write so amazingly.
It always leaves me breathless.
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I love the honesty and the innocency of the write here...thanks for shariang such a wonderful piece my friend.....
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Hudo! (Not sure what that means
but if that's what you want, who am I to judge?)... That said, nice write... I liked the internal rhyming and the feel of this... Nicely done.
Ken
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xD
Umm, that's a typo.
It's supposed to be kudos. D=
lol
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that was short but filled with emotions..very good..
Broken and scattered
is my love and my dreams
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