Tides wash against the sand,
then wash back again.
Trees bend in the wind,
then bend a different way again.
So am I, like the tide or the wind,
a puzzle unsolved,
a confusion to men.
Sand trickles through the hourglass,
time never will stand still.
Jellyfish swim through currents,
but always away from you.
So am I, like time or the jellyfish,
a puzzle unsolved,
a confusion to men.
I am the whisper in the breeze,
always hidden, never seen.
I am the tide swishing back and forth,
a force untouched, a pull never stopped.
I am time trickling away,
never still, never will.
I am the jellyfish swimming away,
a slippery hold, a story never told.
I am a puzzle unsolved,
a confusion to men.
My answer still hidden,
My story just around the bend.
A contest entry
- please solve me... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended June 20, 2008, 19 entries
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this is really good and strong poetry! i like the line "a confusion to men" a lot and especially how you repeated it over again! it really wonveys the message of the poem!
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I love the rhyme scheme of this poem. It really makes the whole thing. It flows so smoothly, like the whole thing just like slips off your tongue. I think the way you use repetition is genius. It is just enough, not too much so that it is annoying but enough to really draw your attention. The whole mystery part of the poem is brilliant too. Overall fantastic poem. I am truly in love with it!
My favorite line would have to be "Sand trickles through the hourglass,
time never will stand still." It is the line that really drew my attention, you know the line that i can really relate to,
Thank you so much for entering my contest -
This is beautifully introduced soul..I love its immagery and the depth as well..thanks for sharing it...well done...
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why aren't we mysterious. hmmm.
very nice. as always, i like. -
Very nice write... I like the repetitive lines that reinforce the mystery here... Well done.
Ken
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