Your first words
the gentle touch
the moment you give me the emotion
i started feeling pain but enjoyed
that is what i liked
only once in my life
with you..
A contest entry
- Three Options by sOuL.
450 points, ended June 16, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Bittersweet words of love mixed with pain...the joy of meeting someone you love...
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Interesting
Very nice and deep.
M.antoinette
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thanks for joining
though it didnt fit this contest -
What a flow of words! A very good little write. One anticipates that this is like an introduction to further writes as this was your First moment!
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Alot said in a few words, and alot left unsaid, great write, looking forward to reading more.
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this is a very good expression of your feelings
i feel it is rather short
you could express a little more
anyway i will be looking forward to read more poem by you
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Your background makes it hard to see the words. Other than that, I found this piece just wonderful. This is deep and there is more to this then meets the eye. Keep writing.
With
Dark
Love
Wayne Leon
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this is good
this is good, but the background ruins the attraction towards the appeal of the poem. Haley27
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This is a great write. It is very hard to read with the background and letter color. I really like the feel of this poem. Nice job and keep writing! Blessings, Patty
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Sweet! But you might want to change the font!! I realised you are new to this place as well! Lets hope, we enjoy our time here!
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