is to carry sweet words
to the child asleep in the next room
and to lay them across her shoulders like a lei
Author notes
carezzando – to play the piano in a tender manner
Chopin had the carezzando-touch
In a list
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt #8 => Because I Could Hear Your Words Already! Quickish! by marlene47.
600 points, ended June 7, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Nicolette,
You have such a tenderness to your soul.
This was beautiful and confirms just how important
and necessary the comfort of love truly is.
Lovely write my friend.
Take care
Love Peace
campanaro
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that's pretty! what's carrezzando?
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Wham!
the words couldn't have fit into place any better
like a pic and a ukulele
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beautiful! i think
this poem inspired
me alot; i thank you
for such beautiful words
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you should hear me hammer the keys...oy!
this piece is genuine Nicolette gentleness and heart
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origins of truth. truths of all.
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This is super tender and so so sweet. I could visualize the child in the next room and a sweet melody drifting across one room to the next. That is amazing for me to have such a clear picture when you only penned a few words.
Bravo Poet,
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Golden essence, indeed. How often that sleeping child is the child within who needs the soft assurance that he/she is cherished and safe. We have a heritage to bestow, and the idea of sleeping in a haven of flowers is about the strongest metapor I could ever imagine that life is meant to bless our dreams .
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No wonder i love you, Karen... what a light you've placed here on this page. I simply love the way you looked at this little poem. Thank you, my friend
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Oh my! I like the sublime rendition of this piece.
The imagery - I want to embrace.
Keep sharing my friend
HENSLEY
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soft and beautiful
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The most special endearing thing you can end the day with
I am imagining a second lullaby touching to the night mirthful images here, and I haven't noticed you writing about children, but it still has the same loving quality. Your titles are always the greatest, this one flows right into your emphasis, taken in an enthralling and relaxing family time spent either using real instruments or ones they can assimilate. A beautiful remark in the beginning line as music notes that are expansive, playing even before getting to or checking the young one's bed area, with strong want.
Long-term berceuses are from your impact in a quickie; isn't it such a gift if you surprise a close one with something combined in nature's flowers and so much more. That's what I love about time-taken lyrics soothing to falling asleep delved into the picture... the bond is like receiving such figuratively when awake.
You took a prompt of what may be written for really simply or cliche, but you broke it as always, congratulations on gold!
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Thank you PIA-K - what a lovely comment!
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mmm...beautiful! when you're a mother...you just know how it feels cause it's indescribable...
this is very pristine...
i miss my daughter, she's with his dad and when i click into this, was surprised to know it's about a mother and her child
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Everything reminds me of those beautiful moments I had in those four years
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Aawh, leander.... big's, dear one....
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Tender
This is such a loving and tender write and the intent oozes sweetly from the few but beautifully descriptive words. This leaves warm fuzzy feelings within, thank you for that.
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Made smile! This is oh so very tender!
I love the way your fingers produce images when they touch the keyboard...
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brava!
this is divine
most worthy of gold! :
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gorgeous.
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Well, tears spring.
Such a soft, tenderly loving piece! Wonderful act - to gently carry words in and lay them down, like a lei no less! I can hear this also in your musical reference, the achingly melodic strains of Chopin's Nocturnes. Thank you for your sublime entry.
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Thank you, Marlene. Yes Chopin's Nocturnes or perhaps also his Berceuse
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Oh my! How beautifully you describe the feeling.... the miracles you do with what I call your "piano pieces"... amazingly done, Nic!
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Brilliant, beautiful brevity, saying so much, my dear Friend. Incredible penning, Sweetie. Good luck in the contest, you amazing, tender woman. Vlindertjie
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Lovely...
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I really enjoyed how the title played into the actual poem. I normally would consider that a tad cliché but you do it with a marvelous smooth feeling that keeps you caught in your embrace, like the child in the other room.
No critiques here nicolette. You move me.
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I wanna play ...Sighhh
~ Nicky♥
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gorgeous!
just like...
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Now, see, this is why you are the perfect potetess!!!!!!!!!!!!! There are no words to imply such gentleness as this requires.
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I've missed your words
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...is to...
with exquisite tenderness, charm and grace, you laced a string of word pearls with precision. well done. I learned something already today - carezzando
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Wow, Nicolette, this is such an expressive image... soft and full of delicacy like a lullaby. I love it
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This is soft and lovely.
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such a gently pretty write Nic
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beautimous my friend.... has that quietude that evokes happiness when read out loud
Gilly.xxxxxxxx
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And words are made divine!
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As tender and warm as you, dear one.
Simply exquisite.
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amazing...
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This is one of the most BEAUTIFUL quickies I have ever read. Your word choice is fabulous and it took my breath away.
This poem is warm.
~Cassie
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As soft as the poet who wrote this
Love, C
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