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Escape.

That night walking away seemed like escape
I ran from your bed, dashing out the door.
Gasping for breath, closing my eyes to clear my head
Down the stairs and out the front door.
Past the streetlights that made the rain glint like diamonds
Through the street that leads onto yours
Stumbling over the memories of walking you to your gate
staggering over images of us holding hands and cuddling
Choking on the taste of your lips.
Coughing up the kisses I trail down from your neck
I fall over the corner and the feeling of being loved
Scrapping my hands with touches I left down your back
Bruising my knees with pavement and carpet burns
Crawling to the grass with pictures of crawling in your bed in mind
Lying down to let you catch up. Lying even harder to myself about my flight
Letting you pick me up. With a casual grasp of your hand and cheap pick up lines.
Walking back with you like it was all the storm. Really thinking I've just hit the calm before it.

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  • Blooming Poet
    October 27
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    I like the action put into this poem. Very well written. Thanks for entering


  • Dryad Enya
    September 10

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    Wow, you a breath taking, quite litteraly...although I mean it in a contense of figurativly...obviously. Lol. This is sharp, all action thriller and I can't wait to read more. I wont say I want to be in this scene but you know thats because I have a lover and I would never wish to cheat on him...loyal till the death as they say.

    Wonderfull work,
    best of luck in the contests hope you are well
    Dryad Enya


    • FightOffYourDemons
      September 10
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      I have never thought about it as someone cheating but i suppose I could see how you could see it that way but that's not what i intended the poem to be about.
      Thanks for the comment though

      Hope you are well too,
      Nikki


  • Heva Feva
    June 6
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    Great job. Good luck and thanks for entering my contest.
    -heva


  • The Unknown Poet1
    June 18, 2008

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    this isn't too dark a bit shadowy but fine. You a fine take on the poem given with its emotional aspects thank you for entering my contest


  • K-GyaL
    June 10, 2008
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    Wow.
    I really felt this poem and as I read it I could picture every movement.
    Good Job! =)

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