While others flee when storming gods roll through
We stand as heroes, fools, awaiting trial:
Though shadows fall from angels, we are true
They bring our chequered past to judge us too
As if a kiss is measured by the mile:
We are not old in love, my love, but new
I will not dare, in case you misconstrue,
To ask you to compare another’s smile:
Though shadows fall from angels, we are true
Hands intertwined in innocence undo
The knots of jealous lovers lost in style:
We are not old in love, my love, but new
And just as blood, in veins, pretends to blue
We clothe ourselves from outer-worldly guile:
Though shadows fall from angels, we are true
In dreams as one, we still are counted two
When hearts elope from metered brick and tile:
We are not old in love, my love, but new:
Though shadows fall from angels, we are true
Author notes
Prompt word: NEW
Villanelle.
A contest entry
- Rhyme and Flow part 3 New - 50,000 points series by cricketjeff.
4000 points, ended June 15, 2008, 51 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Thank you for your entry in our contest. A truly beautiful villanelle and a joy to read,
Congratulations on the HM, well deserved, and we look forward to reading more from you in our future contests...Sue and Jeff
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Brilliant
The connection you feel or have felt with your lover or past lovers must be truly profound for you to write a piece so moving. The tumultuous events you describe in the forefront of this piece are breath-taking to say the least. My favourite line, though, was of course:
"We are not old in love, my love, but new"
The last stanza gave this piece the gravity of all those rock n' roll love ballads that have intensified the love, lives, and love lifes of human beings across the globe.
This piece was honest, complex, and eloquent. The structure, rhyme, rhythm and flow of this was done in what seems to be emotional juxtaposition to the words themselves. One who has trully loved will immediately recognize the feelings to be found within this work. Brilliant!
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as I follow the rhyme scheme and arrangement of lines, I see an enjoyable pattern emerge. It is one with which I was not well acquainted with.
It's a pleasant poem to read.
Thanks
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Completely divine. I cannot say any more than this.
Love, Lane
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Through the shadows we stand to be judged. Nothing old, nothing new. As lover's we are not one ...but two. Each of us held accountable ourselfs!
Very nice Vinanelle!! ~Sie
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