I find myself starring at the glow of the monitor
memories flooding and haunting my mind
the image of you looking so peaceful and angelic
long flowing luxurious blond hair
soft bright striking piercing baby blue colored eyes
and an incredible hour glass shaped body
to compliment your beautiful angelic like gracefulness.
Searching deep within myself
my mind opens up and wanders back to the time
we had together from the cold winter nights
to the bright sunny summer days
time of innocence was us back in the day.
Everything reminds me of you
from people kidding each other in affection
to people holding hands symbolizing their love for each other
everything comes flooding back and leaves me
crying like a new born baby being freshly
plucked from a mother's womb.
How I yearn to relive those days with you my love
you were my everything that I could ever want
we dreamed of having a family together and
being together till we grew old
then fate snatched you away from me
and I am left here to drown in my blood stained tears.
As my tears drown me into a depression beyond repair
I often remind myself that you are there for me
and that you will always be watching over me
but its your love and warmth I miss the most
and the lazy times we spent together.
Oh how I yearn to be with you again Chelsie.
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=( R.I.P. Chelsie =(
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A fine poignant write and tribute. You have my empathy.
Thank you for sharing this one with us. Again, very well done. -
Wow, that was beautiful. The wording and the word pictures, so descriptive. I wasn't really expecting this piece from you. But I guess I'm just now getting to know you. But it's beautiful, it made me start to cry. It made me remember too much. But I'm glad I stopped by.
Pixie
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Great emotions!!!
I know how it feels when we lose our world. The person we love the most. But life never stops.
And it should never stop. Coz "Life Looks The Way We See It!"
Life....the way we see it!
Laughter, pain, sorrow and hope
Dreams, friends, lost and gained
Summer, rain, autumn and blossom
Morning breath and cold coffee cup
Shadows in the dark
And loneliness in crowd
Quality time with kids
And messing up relationships
Running late, winning hearts
Cleaning the plates
And hearing the dark
The sound of water, the burning sun
Laughter of playing kids
Missing the fun
Life Looks The Way We See It!!!!
I never go in unknown authors pages and comment. But I dont know why I felt checking out your columns.
I dont know if you would like it or not but I felt saying this to you. Sorry if you felt offended. I didn't mean to.
Take care.
God Bless.
--peru.
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How sad. I was almost crying. This is so touching and the sadness here really hit home for me, because I can relate.
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U have my empathy, my friend. -
hey paul
how are ya? sorry its beem so long
its hard when you lose someone, i also lost someone very closer to me... its tough. this poem says it all. from the happiness to the pain..
great write
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This is so heart breaking.
It brought tears to my eyes. Wonderfully woven piece of sorrow.
I'm sorry for your loss.
Lil
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beautiful
a wonderful write to chelsie. may she live on forever in ur heart and mind for ur memories with her r precious. its sad losing ur first love to death but at least she is no longer in any pain. always remember the good times u 2 shared together and don't let anybody ruin them for u. a good write which is very beautiful. keep it up.
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Sad one.
This is sad but I know that you are expressing your heart felt love for her. Lost love is always a difficult thing to get over. If you can call it getting over because you never really do.
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In the first line there is a spelling mistake, otherwise a good poem, recalling the memory of innocent love of childhood, which if consummated in adulthood however may not remain so innocent. A romantic nostalgia pleases us all, as such this poem will please many.
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This is a beautiful but devastating piece of writing, so deep and meaningful. Its a strong tribute to Chelsie, just remember to keep her memory alive.
♥ Jojo x sinnocence
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If this is not poetry, I don't know what is
Great stuff - wonderful! Many people can relate to your poem. There is a bit of a twist in the last stanza that changed the expression on my face - I started to feel very sorry for you. -
oh this is a very sad AND PAIN-LADEN POEM FULL OF REGRET AND MEMORIES OF A GOOD TIME WHICH WILL NOW NEVER COME BACK. the loved one is dead and that's a tragic thing.
it's hard to discern who this loved one is as the focus is on self-pity and regret rather than giving an overview of the kind of relationship this was. clues point to the fact that it was a sexual relationship. Perhaps it was a wife who died trying to produce a child? I think that because of this:
everything comes flooding back and leaves me
crying like a new born baby being freshly
plucked from a mother's womb.
Typo alert:
starring? or staring?
The poem depends a lot on cliche and generalities, almost as if the poet can't remember enough about the relationship. perhaps this happens when one is grieving.
i take it that this is a first draft of a poem?
i hope things improve for you & this poem.
best wishes,
myron.
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I am really sorry for your loss.
This poem paints the picture of a longing heart. Your feelings are true and morning her with your poetry is a very good thing to do. She gets to hear what you feel and you get to share even if you are worlds apart.
May prayer is that you will find refuge and comfort in writing to her. My your heart heal and always remember her.
Becks
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Great poem
I feel for your loss...deep down inside. I've lost many a love...but not to death, yet I still feel the same depression as you. Thank you for this poem. 10/10.
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I'm sorry to hear about your loss... this poem was sad, really sad. I almost teared at the final segment.
It reminded me of someone close to me who died a few years ago.
Just remember you aren't alone in this.
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