Spent so many nights alone
lying next to you.
redefining the meanings of love
and trust
where is it that you go
your mind floating distantly from me.
who draws your thoughts tonight.
does she know about me
wide awake, seeing dawn break
over the lies that built this home
slamming shutters closed in vain
tomorrow will never cease to arrive
blink the sleep from bloodshot eyes
tell me everything I need to hear
but you stink of sweet affairs
mistresses that slip through my senses
marks I never could have made
riddle your beautiful figure like sins.
you even taste of blissful adultery
the lips I catch are no longer mine alone.
birds chirp. morning moves upon us.
we slip on our lies with our clothes
both afraid to come home alone
wedding rings seal our silent deals.
I won't ever ask you about all these things
The places I know you go, your sins
as long as you keep up your end
and never speak your hard truths
Author notes
So, I think i may have flipped the meaning fo the title a bit but when i saw it I thought hmm, maybe staying with someone isn't as romantic as it sounds. You know?
Point of view is the victim's.
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I love so many things about this poem. It's so hard for some people to conform to expected monogamy. Whether a partner cheats physically or emotionally there always seems to be this tension of what could be or emotional disloyalty. A desire to escape. Great work here, Thanks for entering and best of luck to you!
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Good write.... Knowing the lies but hidding them away.. i like your piece good luck
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i love this soo much!!! by far one of my favorite in this contest. soo well writting honeslty
"Spent so many nights alone
lying next to you.
redefining the meanings of love
and trust"
I feel this everyday of my life now with my boyfriend. Thanks for entering. Great write and good luck in the contest! -
Very creative job with this piece.
I was expecting something different by the title, but you've done a great twist on it.
Bravo
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Very well written, I think you should dump the bum.
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The first two stanzas could use a bit of work, I found them a bit choppy, not flowing well, and I wasn't the most fond of the punctuation you chose.
After that part, I was truly impressed with the rest of the piece. Your word choice was terrific with "sweet affairs". The word Sweet was a unique choice and I'm glad you took that risk. "marks I never could have made..... like sins" great lines. My favorite was "you even taste of blissful adultery/ the lips I catch are no longer mine alone" . "lies with our clothes" was great!
I was a little unsure of the line "both afraid to come home alone". I'm not sure of how it fits.
Overall, I really enjoyed this piece, but I don't really think it fits my contest. If you chose the option "a difficult time in your life, how you managed to get by", I suppose you managed by not accusing your husband of such terrible sins. You were being true to your marriage by not accusing, but staying silent isn't always the best answer. I enjoyed reading your AN, too.
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well written
a very interesting write from you today. not what i was expecting to read at all but that is not necessarily a bad thing. thank you for sharing this write with me today and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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EXCELLENT!!! so worth reading!
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