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Dead Bird

Missing image

A Song of Rebirth

 

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They said the bird was dead

murdered at the hands

of the black laced harpies

who pounded the air

with their fists of furies

and struck the death blow

in the dank of night

when the pond

glowed with a silver sickle

 

So they left me alone

to sit with the corpse

on its deathbed of clover and dirt

and I watched through the night

while the moon sighed

in crystal slivers

of cut-glassed water

 

But a dead bird won’t shimmer

with the sky still deep in its wings

and the moon won't sparkle

from a blank beaded memory

staring back

from the cold empty space

on the other side

of never

 

So when that night

swallowed itself in its grief

and belched the black weeds

of nothing

back in my face

I saw the ghost raise and take flight

on blue silver tipped wings

soaring back into the golden sky

and sunshine

 

 

~~~~~

Author notes

Based on a dream I had ...



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  • PerVirtuous
    June 7, 2008
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    Hmmmm. I shall not go into that dream... I am scared! Theree bunnies for you.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    June 7, 2008

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    Oh my

    This captured me the whole way and what a dream so vivid are your words it let me see within your mind yet for a moment


  • EvilKate
    June 6, 2008
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    You have the most beautiful dreams


  • apples fell
    June 6, 2008

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    This is good stuff Karen. I was very happy to see your poem pop up in my favorites and I was like "new poem" and I grinned. Really grinned. And if I was going to say anything critical I don't think it would be very good as I found this captivating and fell in love with each verb, each noun, each foreboding image. I wouldn't say it is dark though. But human and cleverly done.

    Love this Karen. I will probably read this another thousand times and just take it in. Also to check back and see what you do with it as I read your authors notes.

    Marvelous stuff.

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