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I Thirst For You

Your water pours
upon these drenched hot
summer nights

Light fingers trace
strength.
Your body powerful
as the mighty oak.

 My mind never wandering

from this moment,
completely urgent, need.
I thirst your desire!

Slightest caress of fingertips.
My body tremors
under skillful hands.


 Cause and reaction.
Soft gentle rain
tends to my tenderness.

But our friction
mounts a storm.
Lightning crashes between
soft flamed thighs.

Down-pouring loves shower.
Kisses,

 I reach up
to take greedily.

Hungering to taste
each pulsation.
Our bodies in unison.

Like a swell pounds and
cascades on the ocean's tide.
Shaking me
to rapid sensation.

Overwhelmed outcries
the only sound.
My breath heavy,
skin upon your skin.

Only slowing down
in small intervals.
Whispering love's exchange
eyes meeting my gaze.

Your fiery love
is all i care to see,
for a lifetime.

Sleep comes too early.
 I will be next to you,
until morning breaks
my love.











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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    July 9, 2008

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    I know that this is perhaps going to sound harsh and please believe I don't mean it to be -

    but I feel as if I have read this before. There is no true uniqueness that stands out for me.

    I think you have a base here, some good imagery and well placed emotion but I would love to see more of a wow factor


  • trista gold member
    June 16, 2008

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    I knew as soon as I saw the background, something special was coming! This was a wonderful read, leaving just enough to the imagination, yet hot enough to cook an egg over!


    ~J.


  • Jet City Woman
    June 14, 2008
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    Wow! I think I need a smoke!


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    June 14, 2008

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    Yes..when you write about love it shows the life itself..and that is so beautiful life..well done..thanks for sharing it...


  • snowbird600
    June 9, 2008

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    Phew, wheres the fan, or better yet a cold shower will do. WOW Lisa, intense write!
    I like the background too. Definitely steamy!!
    Love
    Steffany


  • tomisb
    June 8, 2008

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    editorial comment. You don't need the word like in like cause and reaction. Least I don't think so. the word like feels out of place.

    the work. sensual, hot, stunning metaphors, aches big enough to drive a Mac truck through, still very much cold shower material. Love the last verse.
    Love, Tom B.


  • azlyn gold member
    June 8, 2008

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    Very intense and dripping with desire. Lovely poem for this contest title! I love the background as well. Thank you so much for the entry and very best of luck!!!


  • tomisb
    June 7, 2008
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    Let me know when it is written. Please.
    Love, Tom B.


  • Galaxy2
    June 6, 2008
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    Oh my....
    Waiting impatiently.....

    Galaxy2

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