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力 Quintessential Bliss 爱

 

Quietly falls the night, and quiet, too,
quintessential bliss, kiss quite outstanding,
sees need for walls free falls, joys sarabanding
as each heart s[w]ings through each, one springs from two.

  

Mysterious of mice and men are motions
audible to far too few, most branding
energies as noise, though[t] time's fleet sanding
cleaves grains to rocks, makes mountains climb from oceans.

 

Monkey puzzle prestidigitation
at once conceding, pleading, and demanding,
udders affection, never contrabanding,
echelons mocks with due disapprobation.

  

Nor torn, nor tension tau[gh]t, unspoken thought
now spirals out proactive and expanding,
empathetic waves through spectral banding
can school pooled ripples round to peaceful port.

 

Wonder sloughs off habit as Spring leaf,
drawn sunwards, shrugs off winter frost, disbanding
darkness’ temptation while, old cold withstanding,
each through each rediscovers true relief.

 

Matchless interplay implicit linking
unique levels, layers understanding,
defeats past hierarchical commanding,
conjurs special script osmosis inking ...

 

Multi-modal melody tunes into

auric aureola notwithstanding
difference and distance, space time landing
echoes vibrations rhyming hearts can twin to.

 

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  • unavailable
    September 3

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    I wish there was a heart throbbing smiley that I could use here, very sweet this is.

    . Rewarded 4


  • Scopene
    August 17

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    The words danced like crystal lights jumping across the oceans surface, the flow, the rhythm it's all so delicate and mystical.

    Genuinely impressed.

    . Rewarded 4


  • Shya
    July 31

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    This was so beautiful! I loved every soft phrase... this is a poem that sings to me. As I like to say, ”无爱无义“. 爱的力量很强,而且也很美。I feel the truth in your words. Thank you for entering my contest.
  • i can't believe i could have read anything so beautiful!
    my favorite lines were:

    "conjurs special script osmosis inking"
    it is just really descriptive and i love it!!! especially the osmosis inking part... i love the fact that you have taken it beyond imagry

    "Multi-modal melody tunes into
    auric aureola notwithstanding"
    i also love this and i still can't believe something so beauiful could have been written and i could have read it!!! if i were to rate this line 1 to 5, it would be a 5

    "Quietly falls the night, and quiet, too,
    quintessential bliss, kiss quite outstanding"
    it is one of the most beautiful things i have ever read!


    i am just so impressed and i am in awe as well! i am just so awed and you are a very talented poet and i wish you a lot of success with this poem and this poem alone!
  • This is simply beautiful :] You definitely have a way with words. This was stunningly incredible. I was in complete awe after reading this piece.

    "Nor torn, nor tension tau[gh]t, unspoken thought
    now spirals out proactive and expanding"

    I think those were my favorite lines. I like the whole "tau[gh]t" thing. The format was great, everything about this was great. Thanks for entering :] <3
  • Incredible piece of poetry this!!! I absolutely ADORE the way you have written this, I really cannot express...I'm speechless, lol but these are my favourite bits:

    Line 6: "as each heart s[w]ings through each, one springs from two."

    Line 10: "energies as noise, though[t] time's fleet sanding"

    Line 18: "Nor torn, nor tension tau[gh]t, unspoken thought"

    These are brilliant! i love how the whole meaning can change at a glance, and then a 2nd

    Thank you so much for sharing this inspiring piece of art, and for entering my contest,

    Luck.



  • This delicate poem is truly a work of art as well as capturing love like a photograph.
    I truly love this piece. Very inspirational !
    Well Done !

  • Chaos Star
    June 12
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    It was good. It's a good poem and a wonderful take on the prompt. I did find, however, that the [w] with the letters was confusing and I don't understand why you did this. I get that the letters make a seperate word if included or not, but it would sound and read much better if you chose a single word.
  • oooh this was cool, I loved the last stanza. Awesome job, a love poem without the word love. Great write, thanks for your entry!
    Blessings,
    ~Michaela~
  • Your words are beautiful
    They stain my heart
    Wow, nice vocabulary
    Favorite Part:

    Wonder sloughs off habit as Spring leaf,
    drawn sunwards, shrugs off winter frost, disbanding
    darkness’ temptation while, old cold withstanding,
    each through each rediscovers true relief.

    Amazing!
    Thanks for the entry
    Good Luck!
    ♥[Katee]♥
  • Amazingly professional write, right here

    -GL in contest

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 8
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    "Quietly falls the night, and quiet, too,
    quintessential bliss, kiss quite outstanding"

    Yes. Quite so.


  • Lily otv
    June 8

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    "Quietly falls the night" and how quietly, almost an endearing whisper, this poem speaks of love, "joys sarabanding" as each stanza filtrates the mind to conjure scenes and feeling of great beauty. Oh! how any lady would feel proud to have such words cleaved as grains to rocks for her on multi modal levels. The language in this poem is not colloquial for many but I personally like to have my brain stretched a little to further my own understanding and use of vocabulary. On all levels this is a quintessential poem of love and romance that speaks to both heart and mind.

    . Rewarded 8


  • maralisa silver member
    June 8

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    Wonder sloughs off habit as Spring leaf,
    drawn sunwards, shrugs off winter frost, disbanding
    darkness’ temptation while, old cold withstanding,
    each through each rediscovers true relief.



    Matchless interplay implicit linking
    unique levels, layers understanding,
    defeats past hierarchical commanding,
    conjurs special script osmosis inking ...



    Multi-modal melody tunes into

    auric aureola notwithstanding
    difference and distance, space time landing
    echoes vibrations rhyming hearts can twin to.
    wonderful poem with lot of beautiful imagery good luck in the contest

    . Rewarded 8

  • To be honest, which I always am, this seems a bit wordy. Like you broke out the thesaurus while you were writing it. I mean having a large vocab and using it in poems is good and all I just think you over used it and made your poem overall not as enjoyable to read. Also I think you could have lost the roses breaking up the stanzas and you definitely could stand to lose the [], which are altogether distracting from your poem. And really I think that all these things masking, distracting and overpowering your raw naked poem are really a sin to the poem and your talent. Because I believe you have a good bit of it. But try stripping it down more. Make it more raw less polished. At least that is how I would like it. I can't read over your other poetry because of the poem but in case you haven't i would like to suggest that you give writing a more rawly emotional poem in plain jane terms.
    I do like the underlying flow of this poem though and there is really something about it but I think that is the talent i know you have showing through.


    thank you so much for entering my contest.
    • To be honest

      Apparently where ignorance is bliss, 'tis folly to be wise.

      Words in brackets vehicle two or more words thus though[t] is both though and thought while s[w]ings is swings, sings wings and sins - 'you pays your money and you takes your choice'

      Roses : Although at times AP experiences formatting problems which renders an almost invisible dot advisable between stanzas to avoid the text appearing as one block, the stanza development is such that each verse could be read in whatever order is chosen.

      More essentially if, once again, you had taken the trouble to read what is before your eyes, you might have been surprised or amused to understand that four of the seven verses retain the same acrostic MAUDE C


      Ma tchless interplay implicit linking
      u nique levels, layers understanding,
      de feats past hierarchical commanding,
      c onjurs special script osmosis inking ...


      M ulti-modal melody tunes into
      au ric aureola notwithstanding
      d ifference and distance, space time landing
      ec hoes vibrations rhyming hearts can twin to.

      Therefore perhaps you will begin to grasp the gist entering into layered writing where the vocabulary may occasionally stretch the imagination but where Fate wags its proverbial finger at the Lady and indicates that she needs to 'fight of her demons' and learn some lessons.


      The xBBx rhyme scheme is maintained throughout ABBA CBBA DBBA EBBA etc.

      _________

      Form 爱 love,力 strength : See the note on my Author's Page "The more constraints one imposes, the more one frees oneself of the chains that shackle the spirit... the arbitrariness of the constraint only serves to obtain precision of execution." Igor Stravinsky

      The Pope quotation also might be noted in this case where without wishing to be insulting at times 'fools rush on where angels fear to [t]read'
      ___________


      Using litotes as a vehicule (in plain Jane English a synonym for the figure of speech would be understatement in case this proves useful) in the case of the person for whom this poem was written, and for many readers, one need not rant LOVE LOVE LOVE to empower internal messages with both sense and sensibility and perhaps even an intemporal quality.

      Had you taken the trouble to "read over your other poetry because of the poem" you might have rephrased much of the present comment

      Enjoy !


  • LadyOfFate
    June 7

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    well it is very nicely written. thanks for entering. you even put the things I asked for in such order! it is funny. good luck in the contest
  • OK..............

    Now this one is deep, sorry, but it flew right over my bi-polar brain. It is VERY interesting I must say!!!!!!!
    POETDONTKNOWIT
    WRITING IT HER WAY
  • wow! this is outstanding! i love the imagery, the diction, the flow, the emotions its stirring inside me! you have some great talent! i can't get over your vocabulary! i pulled out a dictionary every other line. lol. great job!

    . Rewarded 4

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