In a crack of the perfection
you saw my deep affliction;
Amongst the tears I shed
you saw strength, defiance to grief ahead;
In my such carefully guarded gaze
you saw vulnerability and craze;
and you loved me for it.
In my few words you heard
powerful convictions to all that occurred;
In an elegant stride
you saw the arrogance and pride;
In disinterest my character required
you say you saw my secret desire;
and you loved me for it.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Love Quote/Picture Prompt Contest by m...c.
600 points, ended June 7, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rain, Eyes, and Pain Quickie by takemypainaway.
900 points, ended June 26, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Congratulations on your silver
Such a great prompt to work with and you have delivered
warm thoughts.
Frozentearz -
this is very simple rhyme but it caught my attention i love each line and they all are so strong
"Amongst the tears I shed
you saw strength, defiance to grief ahead;"
this part was my fav...
thank you for entering and good luck -
aww this is so sweet. thats how my boy is; any poem i can relate to is a good one. your diction is amazingly good, and the rythm is outstanding!
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Please do not. I, unlike many others, do not care of rules... hehe I like it the way it is. Please do not change it.
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