Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

You hide..

Lock yourself up
Shield yourself in
Not enjoying life
That is your sin

A mask you put on
Your beauty you will hide
To be happy or safe?
You have to decide

You don't deserve to be so scared
Setting your mood on despair
Let yourself out
Go see what is out there

Author notes

4

A contest entry

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • m...c
    June 5, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Very well done. And without a sweat too. It has meaning and grace. Just what to expect from a most precious face. haha I rhymed.


  • StarLightVampire23
    June 5, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    Wow this was great,I think it was AWESOME!

  • MortalPhoenix
    June 5, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    I really liked this poem. I didn't notice the rhyme scheme until the 3rd time I read it, it was very subtle and only added to the flow. I especially loved the last two lines in the first stanza, since that is the message that I think many people really need to hear. The last line however, do you mean "Go see what IS out there"? It looks like you were just typing too fast and didn't notice a skipped word.