She climbs into the boat with trepidation
Her heart as heavy as a stone
She cannot endure the humiliation
The shame, it cuts her to the bone
Why did she accept the ride
In the banana yellow car?
How he laughed when she cried
How he went too far
The boat, it bobs upon the lake
In rhythm with her pounding blood
Her emotions are too much to take
Her tears come like a raging flood
How his moustache felt upon her belly
She screamed NO! but he kept on going
How fear turned her limbs to jelly
Five months gone, and now she's showing
Feeling a small kick, she makes her decision
She stands up in the boat, the water is deep
The moon is full in her fading vision
With crabs and octopus they will now sleep
Author notes
options 1, 2, and 4 I believe "!!!RAINBOWS AND STUFF!!!"
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a very sad reality for too many distraught young women with nowhere to turn.
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Oh wow... This is so painfully beautiful... it almost brought tears to my eyes.... It's just so real and such a horrible thing for anyone to have to go through... Thank you so much for sharing this beautiful piece and keep up the good work.
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Wow! I really like this one. Creepy...
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This is a really amazingly intense poem and I really like the title! Thank you so much for your entry and good luck!
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Wow......
Such a serious poem, and so sad too. It has a very good plot with a clear begining/middle/end, so it's not cut too short. Yet you still used the silly words listed, there were several I didn't even see until I went back to look. I hope you win, cause... wow. G'luck.
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oh my goodness this is sooo twisted...love it, though...where in the world do you get your inspiration? (hopefully not from what you see of my future
perish the thought)
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LOL... just a little slip-up, but you wrote "craps" instead of "crabs." XD
I enjoyed this poem a lot. You did a great job with writing something serious, yet still using the goofy words. I was very happy with this entry. I didn't even notice two of the words when I read through it.
Your imagery was splendid...the banana line was creatively done.
Thank you for your entry!
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oops thanks for telling me about the typo how embarrassing
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Very creative take on the word bank. well done and best of luck
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